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More thoughts about reviews

Some thoughts about reviews which cross my mind. Well. Two, really.

Firstly, is that I’m quite pleased by the requests I’m receiving to review books. I’d like to thank those of you that have been in touch, and I am working away at these. I’ve received an interesting mix, covering sci-fi, fantasy, and horror. Shorter pieces, longer pieces, and a magazine – which will have a different theme in the review and interview.
Thank you all.
I am working through your work, and scribbling merrily away. Please bear in mind that sometimes life can get in the way, books are of different length, and sometimes I just like to doze on the train instead of read.

On a different tack, I wanted to mention authors responding to reviews. Having had a look through various other forums, blogs, etc, there seems to be a number of different reactions to negative reviews. I mention this because, at some point, I am going to have something negative to say about a book I review. I will try to support it, and balance it with positive feedback. But… well, you’ve seen some of the things I have to say. And I reserve the right to do this for several reasons:
1. I’m reviewing the book, therefore I need to be honest
2. It’s my blog, and I will put what I want up there
3. I’m the reader.
If, as a reader, I don’t enjoy something – I need to say that, and explain why. One of the main things a reviewer should be is a surrogate for other potential customers. Something along the lines of “Well, I read that book, just like TrueJDK, and I felt exactly the same way. So, if he’s saying this is a good book, I should be listening to him.”

It’s the same with all reviewers. If I know a reviewer has the same tastes as me, I’m going to pay attention to his/her recommendations. It’s not going to definitively sway me, but it is going to influence me.
Unless, of course, the review simply reads “This is shit”. In which case, I’ll write the reviewer off altogether.

The other side is how authors react to their reviews. (And yes, I have committed the sin of responding to some feedback in these pages. I know this. Thank you.)

From the various websites which abound, I have seen some quite appalling tales of author behaviour. My “favourites” recently have included:

  • The author who received a 1-star review on Amazon, and promptly launched a reply review, including an incitement for all other reviewers loyal to her to post 5 star reviews.
  • The author who threw a MASSIVE hissy fit on a forum board when his work was moved from a traditional publishing board to a smaller/self-publishing board. His rant became legendary.
  • The author who used multiple new Amazon accounts to abuse the people who gave his books 1-star reviews (and obviously bump up his 5-star reviews), and then hassle them through the forum boards.
  • The author who, still in Beta stages, launched a foul-mouthed tirade against those who had not read and provided comprehensive feedback (within two weeks) of his lengthy piece of work.

Add to these pieces of work (who I refuse to name and give any publicity to) those who do the usual mass spamming of forums, Twitter, etc.

Self-publishing has become largely about selling oneself as much as a book. Personality and character count for a hell of a lot. If I find that an author is being, for want of a better phrase, a complete dick, then I’m less likely to buy anything from them regardless of quality. I’m sure that at some point, I’ll attract the vindictive reviews, comments, etc, which come with the territory. By being ready for them, I believe they will have no effect on me.
I can’t please everybody. Either in my book/s, or on here. The world is filled with people of different tastes. Some people will get my book and enjoy it, some people won’t. That’s fine.

I believe every author should gracefully and professionally accept criticism and feedback, no matter how it’s phrased. Outright abuse should never be accepted, but should simply be ignored (no matter how satisfying it is to call an abusive little troll a tosser). Get to the bottom of the feedback, and work out exactly what the problem is, and take it on board.

Sometimes, that feedback may help you to be a better writer, or give you ideas for the future. In an earlier review, I looked at The Crystal Needle. Whilst I was disappointed by the book in its current state, I felt that it had the potential to be something wonderful, and voiced my opinion on how. The author, Daniel Peyton, may read my feedback and think “What a great idea!”. He may ignore it altogether. That’s absolutely his right as an author.
I would be more disappointed in him if he launched a vitriolic attack on me for not getting his book, or for writing something unpleasant. (He hasn’t done this, by the way.)

There are a number of frustrations which authors can boil over with. Writing a book is a time-consuming, dedicated process, and authors are fairly protective of their work. Editting is probably the most painful part of the process. And, at the end of it, there is something there – something personal, which they have laboured to create. Naturally, this can be quite a sensitive time for authors.
One author took to the forums to lament how he felt worthless and suicidal because nobody had bought the book he had laboured to write within the first week. This plaintive cry was, incidentally, his only form of advertising. Thankfully the (occasionally vicious, usually supportive) writers community was caring, supportive, and helpful in dealing with him. But I’m sure he’s not alone. My point – authors can be emotional, very emotional with their work. Sometimes those emotions can boil over in unhelpful ways.
Authors, you need to recognise and manage this.

On the flip side, I would like to mention the perfect example of an author accepting negative feedback – Scott J Robinson. Scott had written The Brightest Light, and I had reviewed it a little while ago. It was an unsolicited review, and I had never met or dealt with Scott before. In the review, I voiced my frustrations about how he had no reviews at all on Amazon or anywhere else, and how his work was first rate (I stand by this assessment).
And then, I followed up with a different kind of frustration – about the author’s note Scott had included at the end. I felt it was inappropriate, and was offended by it. I was a little vicious in how I reacted to this.
Scott found his way to my review through a Google search, I believe. He read what I had to say, and then he responded as a comment (which is still there, as is the original review). His comment was very thoughtful, considered, well-written, polite and professional. He addressed the concerns I’d voiced, explained, acknowledged that it was his role as an author to get his message across clearly to the reader, and went and changed the author’s note.
I was, and still am, impressed with how Scott handled himself and will hold his behaviour up as a perfect example of how an author should conduct himself.

I am even more pleased to be able to confirm that Scott will be gracing these pages as an interviewee this Wednesday.

In summing up, I wanted to use Scott as an example. A dedicated and skilled writer, who conducts himself affably and professionally in the face of harsh feedback. I felt strongly enough to champion his work before I spoke to him. Following my dealings with him, I would hold him up as a perfect example of an author who genuinely deserves to be doing better.

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Book Review – The Crystal Needle, Daniel Peyton

OK, following on from my comments yesterday, the review in question:

Daniel Peyton’s The Crystal Needle, available for Kindle through Amazon, description at the bottom of the page.

Brief summary: Modern day American family moves to a neighbouring area of Salem. Son is an avid stitcher - enjoying embroidery. Coincidentally, the home they’ve chosen is right next to a good witch, Elsabethe. A stitching with, at odds with her stitching witch sister, Adel. 300 years past the two fell out over dealing with mankind around the time of the Salem with trials. Adel went bad, and abused her powers. Elsabethe bested her, but now she’s coming back. Because, also coincidentally, the stitching kid is a chosen one of sorts for the stitching sisters, and the Japanese fox family which led to all the trouble back in the day.

This is Peyton’s second book in 3 years, and has a number of positive reviews from advance readers on Amazon.com. And there are a number of commendable points about it:

  • Peyton isn’t afraid to go down the old-school, traditional fairy-tale witch route
  • Peyton is obviously very passionate about his subject.
  • It’s a nice tribute to the old good vs evil saga, blending in witchcraft, American history and Japanese folklore.
  • The more one stays with the story, the better it gets
  • The Kitsune family are well written, and particularly enjoyable
  • There’s some pleasant moments in there, with an actual explanation of why the lead (a strong, well-trained lad of 19) enjoys embroidery
  • The backstory to the town’s foundation, division of the witches, etc, is nicely done.
  • Adel as a leaf-witch is far more impressive a concept than a sewing witch

On the negative side of things :

  • The dialogue is absolutely painful to read, and detracts from the story.
  • The formatting of the book needs some serious work, with a number of glaring errors in paragraph spacing, quotation/apostrophes use, spelling, incorrect wording, etc.
  • On a personal note, I personally hate coincidence as a driving force in a story. The staggering coincidence of this boy’s family uprooting to move into the house (which has stood empty on the market for years and years) next to Elsabethe, and that this boy happens to enjoy embroidery borders on the ridiculous.
  • To begin with, stitching is given so much attention, it almost drove me away
  • There are some fantastic scenes which are very poorly handled. Such as one character being pierced with thread, and slowly driven into a patchwork quilt. The inherent horror, the feeling of that character should be through the roof. Instead, the moment is given a throwaway line, and has no later repercussions or effects on said character. 
  • Events, such as the climactic battle, occur and are then pretty much forgotten about. One moment which absolutely pained me was a security guard being assaulted by a character, told to run away, and does just that. And that’s it. Too many little throwaway moments which could have followed up.

There are also opportunities for more backstory around the witches – who tasked them with going out to improve the world by sewing, and why did they not come to stop Adel when she breached the given laws. On another note, I was a little disappointed that Yuki had to adopt a westernised name and look to fit in with the town.

Whilst I commend anyone who takes the time to write about something they feel passionate about, to finish a novel, and to publish it, I just can’t help the feeling that this is a first draft version only, and more work is needed for it to be ready to stand as a quality piece (which it could well be). The formatting and speech just take too much away from the story, and I more often felt that I was reading, as opposed to being immersed in the tale. And, please note, that this is “as it currently stands”.

I would strongly suggest Peyton works on improving the dialogue, and look at formatting before publication/reviewing once live. The potential is there for something fantastic, and I genuinely hope to see that in subsequent publications. I would actually like to see a revised version of this book come out, as I feel it could be something which has a lasting legacy.

Honestly, were this rewritten with a younger protagonist and targetted for a young adult audience, this would be something far, far better. Potentially the start of a lengthy series?

The Crystal Needle can be found at Amazon.com at: http://www.amazon.com/The-Crystal-Needle-ebook/dp/B0069DS694/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1337680478&sr=8-1

And at Amazon.co.uk at: http://www.amazon.co.uk/The-Crystal-Needle-ebook/dp/B0069DS694/ref=pd_ecc_rvi_1

The description runs from their Amazon link runs as follows:

“300 years ago, in the dark shadow of the Salem witch trials, two kind stitching witches founded the city of Featherville as a haven for the unfortunate victims of the witch hunts. Soon after Featherville’s founding a father and his three children arrive seeking a safe home. They are not human, but Kitsune, a magical fox people from Japan. Their story, and the loss of their mother to hunters, tugs at the hearts of the sisters. Elsabethe comforts them, but Adel becomes angry. She uses her magic to avenge the Kitsune against the humans who had hurt them. After tasting vengeance, she begins to desire dominion over man. In her lust for power she destroys the father of the Kitsune and curses his children. Adel is ultimately magically imprisoned by her sister in the forest nearby so that she can do no more harm. But, the seal is not eternal.
300 years later fate begins to move. A family takes up residence in Adels old home and finds a friend in the little old lady living next door, Elsabethe. This family has one son, a 19 year old boy who happens to enjoy embroidery. Joseph is flirtatious, kind, and pretty good on his feet. He becomes close to Allison, the cursed Kitsune girl. Unaware of her true identity, he comes face to face with the reality when Adel makes a terrible and triumphant return. Together, they must find a way to defeat her, saving Featherville and the whole world from the wrath of the Obsidian needle “

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